Sophomore English Major: Three Short Stories

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Sophomore English Major: Three Short Stories

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Hi, just finished my third short story for my fiction/short story class. This makes me happy. So happy that I want to share all three stories with you all. Hope you enjoy.

In order of writing:

(Loveless) Direction
The Last Cowboy Western
The Fairmont Seekers
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this shit better not be about global warming.
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hotrodperlmutter wrote:this shit better not be about global warming.
You know what? Fuck you. Yeah, I wrote an article for the newspaper about the myth of Global Warming. Where is that relevant in this thread? I just wanted to share some short stories with SS.org. It's what I want to do with my life and a little direction or feedback never hurts.

What's your deal? You always shit on my project threads, now you shit on my writing. You're a very insecure man.
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ha ha, yeah dude. i totally just shit all over everything you've ever done.

i said it had better not be, cluing your ass in that i didn't even open the shit.

i read your global warming paper, and it sucked a big wet one.

i'm insecure? i don't have fuck all else to do except pick on lil' ol sparky.

even though you've spouted your mouth off again, with derogatory shit talking taking personal jabs at me, i'll read your fucking fiction, and i'll give you my honest opinion.

if you weren't insecure, you wouldn't give a fuck.
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this isn't the sub-forum for it, hotrod.
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first one: awesome. really great build (kinda simple), and then quick to the predicament. wham! i especially loved the moment after the bullet shreaded your brains, and you could still see!!! fucked up!

second: brilliant as well. i had no idea where it was headed.

and last but certainly not least;

third: great story. good imagery. i knew what was going to happen, sadly. poor bastard. he wanted to believe so much!

great writing. the win here for me is the fictionality. you writing about global warming had a bit of a "y'see" air about it. i didn't see, and i found your logic and your statistics to be either contrived, or just plain wrong. and your use of the language rather stilted, and dry.

stick with the fiction, it suits you.
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i like the second :D